Talk:The Lion Guard: Visiting The Outlands/@comment-27625725-20160730044809

Hey there! Sorry I was late on this! Great job, Ginny!

Praise:


 * I liked Nita's curiosity about her past! It speaks volumes about her character, suggesting that she wants to know who she is and where she came from.
 * Pula displayed her impulsive side by agreeing to take the young shaman's apprentice to the dangerous Outlands.
 * I was happy to see Kia and Belee showing loyalty to their family!
 * Zazu was quite amusing in this story, and I'm glad he was included!
 * Kion has been shown to be observant, so it was realistic that he would see Janja. Quite well-written!

Criticism:


 * We all have are favorite characters, but sometimes I'd like to see more of Bunga, Beshte, and Ono being helpful!
 * Kion tends to be very insistent about the safety of others, so it's likely he would forbid Nita to go. Maybe Bunga or one of the other Guard members could have gotten some more time in the story by talking him into letting them go.
 * Kion's usually a tad fiercer with Janja, and would like Roar then and there, though I understand if you wanted to bring Kiara in.