Talk:The Lion Guard: A Celebration to Remember/@comment-27625725-20160907030553

I quite enjoyed this story!

Praise:


 * I thought it was sweet that Kiara told Kion she was singing a song for him.


 * This story was slightly more detailed than most of yours. Good work!


 * I liked the way Simba announced Mari to the other Pride Landers. Kupatana would certainly be a good time for that!


 * The ending was very nice, sibling love is very endearing.

Criticism:


 * Kion didn't seem very curious about the song. Wouldn't he have more to say when he learned that she would be singing?


 * Your inclusion of "Hear Comes the Lion Guard" was a nice touch, but your choice in the stanza that Kiara started with was a little odd. The line "You've found your place, you're with your friends, the adventures keep on coming . . ." was very quick and somewhat conclusive, it doesn't seem quite right to open a song.