Talk:The Lion Guard: Return to The Outlands/@comment-27625725-20160904185501

Great story, Ginny!

Praise:


 * I liked the way this story opened differently than most of them have been opening as of late!


 * The way the two girls interacted with their parents was sweet. I feel like I don't see much of Kora, so I was happy to see him at Vitani's side with his daughters.


 * It was nice to see all of the Guard members talking! Mostly it's just Kion and Fuli in your stories, this time it felt like the others had more to say.


 * Kata's rudeness added tension to the story, which is a good quality for a story to have!


 * The ending was very nice, with all the kind family bonding!

Criticism:


 * Vitani reusing Nala's line from Six New Adventures was a little unnecessary.


 * Jasiri being such a strong-willed and kind-hearted hyena, it seems odd that she would be so close with her immoral relatives.


 * Simba's threats were a little harsh. Banishment over some unkind words?