Talk:The Lion Guard: Nala's Promise/@comment-27625725-20160818230014

I liked the story!

Praise:


 * Nala's confidence in her daughter was very in-character. Nice!


 * I like to see that Nita is curious about her younger sister. It makes sense, as she does not yet know what Mari will be like when she is older.


 * It's good that you keep mentioning the tension between Vitani and Kora's family. It adds drama to the stories!

Criticism:


 * Sometimes it gets a tiny bit tiresome if the same words are used over and over again. In your stories, I keep noticing "besotted" being used. Perhaps try using some other words with similar/the same meanings, such as "smitten with".