Talk:The Lion Guard: Hope Restored/@comment-27625725-20160728193937

Some praise and criticism for the story. :)

Praise:
 * Kion announcing that Mari spoke her first word further enforced the idea that Kion is very fond of his niece.
 * Beshte was in character.
 * I liked reading the part with Simba and Nala in Hapuna Valley! It was nicely written and showed their pride for their son and their trust in him.
 * The part where Kion braced himself to use the Roar was well done. He didn't just open his mouth and unleash it immediately; he waited until everyone was safe and Sitka was no longer cornered.
 * I was glad to see more of Mari, rather than just hearing her spoken about! I thought it was good that you included her speaking her first word, since all of the characters had discussed it earlier in the story.

Criticism:
 * Rather than making sure Janja was out of the Pride Lands, as he usually does, Kion just Roared him into a river, laughed, and walked off; it's usually Bunga who is facetious about Janja's presence in the Pride Lands.
 * Two characters having the exact same response to Mari's first word was a tad redundant. Seeing each character respond differently is part of what helps readers get to know what sets characters apart from each other.
 * Maybe add some descriptions of the characters? I'd like to know what Mari and Nita look like. For example, to the sentence "Mari gazed up at her older sister" you could add "with round red eyes."